考试经验：英语四级作文行文思路3

　　Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write A Letter Applying for a Bank Loan. You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below in Chinese：

　　1)简单介绍个人情况

　　2)说明申请助学贷款的原因、数额

　　3)保证会合理利用贷款并表明还款的决心

　　A Letter Applying for a Bank Loan

　　行文思路

　　本题属于情景式命题，要求写一封申请信。根据所给提纲，本文应包含如下内容：简单介绍自己的情况，表明写信目的：申请助学贷款;说明申请助学贷款的原因、数额;保证合理利用贷款并表明还款决心，最后表示感谢。

　　高分范文

　　A Letter Applying for a Bank Loan

　　Sep 12th, 2008

　　To whom it may concern,

　　I am a freshman of Lianhe University, [1]majoring in Applied Physics. I am writing in the hope that I may obtain a bank loan to support my study in Applied Physics for the following four years.

　　My parents are both laid-off workers, so it’s [2]beyond their power to finance me through the college education. [3]To make matters worse, my mother has suddenly fallen ill and is expecting a major operation. [4]Therefore, [5]with the college tuition becoming a much heavier burden on my family, I am compelled to apply a RMB20,000 bank loan.

　　[6]I give you my promise that the loan would be used properly. [4]Meanwhile, I’ll [7]spare no effort to work hard both in the study and my future career in order to pay back the loan. I would be greatly obliged if my application is granted. And I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

　　Sincerely yours,

　　Song Xue

　　【亮点点评】

　　[1]“主修…”，现在分词作伴随状语。

　　[2]“超出…的能力范围”。

　　[3]“使事情更糟糕的是”。

　　[4]过渡衔接词语，使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。

　　[5]“with+宾语+宾补”的独立结构。

　　[6]“我保证…”，that引导同位语从句。

　　[7]“不遗余力”。

　　佳句临摩

　　1.佳句：To make matters worse, my mother has suddenly fallen ill and is expecting a major operation.

　　临摩：令人更迷惑不解的是，很多飞机都从大海上离奇消失了。

　　2.佳句：Therefore, the college tuition becoming a much heavier burden on my family, I am compelled to apply a RMB20,000 bank loan.

　　临摩：由于周围交通不便利，人们只得步行回家。

　　3.佳句：Meanwhile, I’ll spare no effort to work hard both in the study and my future career in order to pay back the loan.

　　临摩：全国人民都不遗余力地支持北京举办奥运会1.练好口语，顺便考试拿高分....这是李阳老师的名言。